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Old 01-15-2014, 04:29 PM   #17
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Default Re: FBI Special Agent Connor Shaw

If you want your book taken seriously, I would 1. not name the protagonist after your favorite real life football player and 2. take out the religious stuff.

Also, maybe consider not making the girl scouts deaf... Why are they deaf? Why is there an entire troupe of deaf girl scouts walking around?
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